I offer my thoughts into the night,
Into the shadowy, hazy corner,
Into half-light,
Where they are beckoned to dance.
Waltzing.
A flickering of words that tap,
A repetition,
Sudden
recognition.
A moment of clarity,
A moment of rhythm.
I sing my thoughts into the breeze,
And they are swept with the rush of petals,
which,
scooped with leaves,
are floating.
My words billow with summers transience.
Softly
reminiscent.
A moment of tranquility,
A moment of innocence.
I whisper my thoughts into the sea,
Into the quiet of sand beneath,
And, bleached with salt,
they are comfortably
sinking.
Into their resting,
and into their ashes,
they quietly wait.
A moment of cleansing,
A moment of testing.
This reads very nicely!
Why David Attenborough is reading it in my head I have no idea!
#WhatImWriting
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Thank you
And I’m afraid I look nothing like David Attenborough 😂
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I particularly liked these lines:- I sing my thoughts into the breeze, And they are swept with the rush of petals, which, scooped with leaves, are floating.
When i go out running I have all sorts of thoughts and ideas and I’m sure they are swept away because often when i go to write them down at home -they’re gone, I’d like to be able to collect them in! Clever poem #whatimwriting
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Thank you, I am always losing floating thoughts too… Very annoying 🙂 #whatimwriting
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Another fab poem Luisa. I like the repetition and the shift in tone at the end. Looking forward to reading more! 🙂
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Thank you lovely
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Oh, I LOVE this, it swept me away with the petals and leaves. Just beautiful. Thank you so much for sharing with #ThePrompt x
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Thank you so much xx
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Just popping back from #Prose4T, loved reading this again x
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😊
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I love the imagery you have used here, it is so clear and captivating. I wish my thoughts waited for me! xx
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Thank you x
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What beautiful words, Luisa – so lyrical and kind of floaty and peaceful. This is just what I need to read on a day like today. Oh, just read it again – even better on a second reading. Going back for thirds now…Thanks for sharing with #whatImWriting
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Ah thank you Maddy, I’m glad you liked it. I enjoyed writing it xxx
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Totally beautiful writing as always!
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Oh thank you lovely lady xx
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Beautiful imagery, and an utterly captivating rhythm. It’s made me realise I’m missing being immersed in writing since finishing my latest first draft – I haven;t quite found my feet in this next phase yet! x
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That’s a lovely comment, thank you so much. Good luck with your drafting 🙂 xxx
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Very beautiful imagery indeed and such a lovely rhythm to the ear too.
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Thank you
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I read this 3 times before I commented I just kept going back over. The words just seemed to flow right and it was so nice to read #prose4t
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Thank you so much, what a lovely comment X
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I felt so much peace and calm reading this. Beautifully done. Thank you for linking to Prose for Thought 🙂 x
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